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The Art of Attraction
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Said the short man in the three inch lifts,
To the woman with the Botox lips,
âPeople today are all so phony
How can we know whatâs not baloney?
How do we find out what is real?
And how do we know how we should feel?â
Said the woman with the tinted lenses,
To the short man honing his defenses,
âCanât you just believe in what you see?
The sooner you do the happier youâll be.
Why do we need to find out what is real,
When we work so hard to conceal?â
Thereâs a part of me inside,
That I try my best to hide,
Living in a guarded place,
Tucked away without a single trace.
None may enter and none may see,
âCause if you did you might hurt me.
So I only show the parts I want,
To throw you off when you start to hunt.
Said the short man with the facial hair,
To the woman with the wide-eyed stare,
Youâve got a beautiful augmented body,
Can I drive you home in my Maserati?
Even if itâs only lust that weâll insight,
We can fall in love at least for tonight.
Said the woman with the perfect nose,
To the short man, hereâs what I propose,
Letâs drink and dance right here for a while,
Throw me a glance and Iâll give you a smile.
Letâs give it a chance and maybe who knows?
Letâs wait to see if anyone shows.
Thereâs a part of me inside,
That I try my best to hide,
Living in a guarded place,
Tucked away without a single trace.
None may enter and none may see,
âCause if you did you might hurt me.
So I only show the parts I want,
To throw you off when you start to hunt.
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--Submitted by lanet on 2011-08-07.
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lanet:
Mrae2333,
Thank you for your comments.
Posted 08/08/2011 05:46 AM
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lanet:
Julianne, I did write it as a song. I have a friend who is a song writer and singer and I wrote this for him.
As far as Best in Show, It's one of my favorites. I love all of the Christopher Guest movies.
Posted 08/08/2011 05:45 AM
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mrae2333:
Really like this poem. I think I would leave out both of the stanzas about the "part of me inside" It seems too self reflective, and I think the poem would be much stronger without that stuff. Also for sound, in the second stanza, what about substituting "know" for the words "find out?"And do you mean incite? or insight? Also the word "for" tonight. I think at least tonight flows better without "for."
Posted 08/07/2011 06:39 PM
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Julianne Carlile:
This is sort of like a song, with the repeated refrain. Is that what this is?
On the dog subject, did you ever see "Best in Show"?
Posted 08/07/2011 11:33 AM
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