Open Mic User Submitted Poetry

martin1223:
silence • snowflakes melt on the window
Posted 12/25/2012 11:38 AM

Eiken:
Lovely, very peaceful, almost a meditation and yet some of the words you use do give a feel of an underlying anxiety, it is what you do not say in this poem that speaks. I write haiku and for me silence says so much. Silence between words stories.
Posted 09/13/2011 06:05 AM

Katrinka:
Thanks for the comment. I appreciate it your careful reading. kw
Posted 08/22/2011 08:27 AM

mrae2333:
Wonderful awakening poem. It's why we write to pay attention (well, me, that's why I write, to hear the barely inaudible insects) It almost seems toungue in cheek. You claim it soothes you, but the words like "high-pitched." and "angry rattle" and "too close for comfort" and even "vacant" suggest something is underlying the stillness, something that isn't still, maybe even worriesome. I am always a little wary of the word soul in a poem. It is such a weighted word. And as the last word it is even more obtrusive, drawing a lot of attention to itself and away from the rest of the poem. It could simply end, The sweet sounds of beauty that soothe me.
Posted 08/20/2011 08:41 AM