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What makes a Fool
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Hannah Rosenfelder
What makes a Fool?
A fool is the man who fights against facts.
He doesn’t know when the war has been won.
It’s not good for him, its limits he lacks.
The mistakes he’s made cannot be undone.
A fool is the woman set to change man.
He does not love her, and she still persists.
Gets lost in her dreams, and makes up a plan,
Change all she is until he can’t resist.
A fool is the youth shot by concern.
So full of worry he forgets to live.
His best years are gone; it’s too late to learn.
Lost childhood, and now has none to give.
Those who live blindly, stuck in their own ways,
Will stay as fools for the rest of their days.
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--Submitted by Python27 on 2014-05-11.
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DaRusskey:
"A fool is the man who fights against facts."
I guess that makes the poet seem a fool, eh? In any case, I feel that your poem could have gone much deeper if you'd have used a different second stanza. There's a lot out there for you to use, but not only is this misdirecting said foolishness, I feel, but it emphasizes the foolishness of the decision after the fact.
To be honest, the poetry, like this, that only presents a problem and not a solution doesn't do much for anyone. You may sound a little smarter, but in the end all this does is degrade those who feel the need to persist, to be diligent, to even have a hope. I get that it could be considered a warning, but I don't believe this to be a warning better said in a poem than experienced by the individual.
Posted 05/26/2014 10:31 AM
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