Open Mic User Submitted Poetry

Eiken:
Wow Christopher, short but very powerful. I love the double edged sword at play as that is how we humans can sometimes behave. I am glad that the words that cut you had the power to heal you:)) Maire
Posted 05/18/2011 11:38 AM

cbaustin:
hence... the fragile, glass heart. Thanks for the comments, everybody.
Posted 11/22/2010 10:43 AM

Julianne Carlile:
That's pretty nice that she can cut you AND heal it.
Posted 11/20/2010 12:16 PM

David Cooke:
Nicely done. The parallel structure ties the two images together well. The simplicity of the language and the brevity make the poem open and shut with satisfaction. Even more brevity and immediacy can be achieved by rewording the first line to eliminate the "was" and bring the narrator closer to the word "broke". Also by taking out "went" and "let" and relying on "stitch" as the verb for the third stanza's first two lines.
Posted 11/15/2010 01:03 PM

sillygirl:
Wow. love the image. very powerful.
Posted 11/14/2010 07:28 AM