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Grief Work
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Phyllis Beckman |
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Grief showed up (anger left town)
Grief long held at bay
Grief engulfed, enfolded, soared
Grief "work" was underway
Anger's absence left a void
Like an empty house
Grief moved in with outstretched arms
Quiet as a mouse
I'm permitted grief, I guess
Now that I am old
Grief has waited long enough
Out there in the cold
Come on in! Let's have a sit!
A seance if you choose
Let it loose, let grief spill out
What have we got to lose?
Grief's permitted in this space
Grief is "one of us"
Bring grief to this Recovery Room
No one makes a fuss
Hugs and hankies, love abounds
Tears and laughter blend
After coffee we file out
Grief feels like a friend
Grief is loving--anger hurts
Anger tears my soul
Anger moved out weeks ago...
Grief will make me whole.
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--Submitted by Phyllis Beckman on 2011-03-02.
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Glenda Beall:
I think anger is a part of grief, but getting past it is difficult as we go through the whole grief journey or process.
I like the repition of the word grief in this poem.
Posted 03/21/2011 03:04 PM
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lanet:
I loved the ending on this poem. Thank you for sharing it with me.
Posted 03/04/2011 06:48 AM
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Phyllis Beckman:
sillygirl:
I could put a comma at the end of the
first line, and "....."at the end of the second line to encourage pauses. I want to keep the Grief repetition going.
In the fourth verse, I could say,
come on in, girl, have a sit! to personify?
I'm honored that you have spent time with this piece. Thank you.
Posted 03/03/2011 02:46 PM
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sillygirl:
I love the idea behind this, of allowing grief to run its course and heal. I do have a pair of suggestions, though. The first is a comma: "Grief, long held at bay/Engulfed, folded, soared..." To rediuce the repetition in the first stanza. Although, come to think, grief is very, very present when it first visits, so you may want to leave it as is.
Also, consider personifying Grief to refer to it as "he" or "she" to help demonstrate the relationship quality with the process, while simultaneously reducing repetition.
Just some Ideas - I adore your work, so please take no offense! :)
Posted 03/03/2011 06:37 AM
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